writting task Corrected

                                                                           03/01/1978

Today was a very important day! I don`t know how to start. The only thing that I can say is that I am proud of my son

   I can`t forget what happened yesterday, it was Hassan’s birthday, he turned 8 years old. First we went to a kite shop. I told Hassan to choose a kite, because it was his birthday.  He was very happy and he chose the kite carefully. The kite he chose was perfect. If I were him I would've chosen the same kite. I didn’t imagine that this kite would win the tournament.

  Today we woke up early and we went to the tournament. It was a snowy day. The two boys started flying the kite when I was in a restaurant with Rahim Khan. We had the best vision of the kites, and of my son. 

   When Amir and Hassan were preparing the kite for the tournament, I talked with Rahim about Amir’s birthday. I think that we can do to him a big party, with a lot of people. I am sure that Amir would enjoy it. The party will be perfect. Rahim told me that he will help me in every moment if it is necessary, whatever I want. I am grateful of him, he is a person in which I can trust. Also we talked about the gifts that we can give him. I thought a lot in my gift because it has to be special. The best option I think is a watch, a beautiful watch. Rahim thinks that my gift is perfect for Amir, he thinks that Amir would be grateful. Rahim told me his gift. I realized that Rahim pay so much attention to Amir. He wants to give him a book to write histories, a hobby that Amir do daily and enjoy it a lot, I think that his gift is perfect.

   When Amir and Hassan raised the kite, I remember my childhood flying kites , the exact moment when I did my record. Amir and Hassan do a perfect team together. It bought me svereal memories. Amir cut a big number of kites, in that moment I thought that they could win and break my record. Rahim bothered me a lot about that. He was saying that my son is better than me.

    The last kite was a blue kite, I  trust always in Amir. He have all the conditions to cut it. It was a very uptight moment, Any of it could be cut. It was a hard fight, I didn’t resist more and I stood up of  my chair. My son would break my record and would be better than me! He would be a man, a big man. The moment that I enjoyed the most was when he used the technique that I teached to him (lift and dive). He used that to cut the opponent kite. He won!! All the people celebrated, it was amazing. Hassan went for the blue kite and I went to celebrate with Amir. At the night Amir came back to the house with the blue kite. In that moment I felt proud of my son, he broke my record and came back with the kite. It was a perfect day. Finally he became a man. He is the best son that anyone could have. I am very proud of him.

writting task (rationale) Corrected

The kite runner tells the history of Amir, an Afghan child that spent his childhood in Afghanistan. He can be considered brother of Hassan, the son of the servant. the serviant left the house and Amir didin`t see Hassan again. Amir at ten years 0has to leave Afghanistan because the soviets invaded the country, so they went to USA. In that period Baba dies and weeks later Amir found his Diary Entry.

    In my written task I wrote about this diary. The diary has the information of all his life but Amir only ficused in the day that he won the kite tournament. When Amir read this almost cry, he felt about the feeling of his father to him, for the first time Baba congratulates Amir, but the real feelings was in the diary, feeling that Amir would`ve never imagined. Also in the diary Baba talk about his conversation whith Rahim Khan, it was abput Amir birthday.

     The aim of the diary is explain the real feelings of Baba, the thought of him in that day, the perspective of his son. I chose this because the book don`t pay much attention in this and it is the best way to tell this.  

    The best way to achive the aim is the diary entry (informal register), because you can explain your feeling with any restriction, only the diary know this feeling but Baba never knows that Amir would find it after his death.